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Well this is the newest member of the Suna Arashi Heard!!:D * aka Sabure's heard :XD: * and his name is " Fire At Will"
I cant tell you guys enough how much I love this guy:love: but the best part of him is his eyes:aww: I LOVE red and green eyes so much:) Well here is his info.....

Name: Fire At will
Breed: German mustang ( like most of my horses)
Age: 9
Mate: ?
Personality: Fire At will has a quiet personality. Not really causing trouble, or being annoying, but....just quiet. He rarely speaks up for himself, and has had a past with a lot of trama. Fire at will is VERY strong. Almost as strong as Sabure, but not yet;) He likes the wind for some strange reason, no one really noes why, but he disappears during the sand storms and tornadoes. His favorite food is clovers and cactus.

History: Fire at will was born during a massive war so He grew up around fires and explosives. The Humans were crewel to him, and forced him through a lot of pain when he was young to prepare for war. Fire At Will would have tightly bound barbed wire on his legs, as well as belts and bandages. This was indeed so excruciating but Fire At Will's motto to get him through all of the pain was " what doesn't kill me, will only make me stronger!"
one year passed, and Fire At Will was still at the war base. the war between boundary's was only getting worse. The Northern Boundary ( Fires boundary) was loosing the war, and the southern Boundary, the enemy, was growing stronger each day. Fire over-herd the General speaking to a Sargent about how they had built planes. They said that they were going to loose the war, and by the end of the war they would all be dead. This startled Fire At Will, and he knew that he was going to die with the rest.
Weeks had past, and the battle fields were quiet. Littered with the bodies of the enemies and their horses. Fire would look out side his small window each day, looking at the tall hill about 3 miles away. He had always wondered what was on the other side of it. All fire knew...was it was the road to freedom.
Another week gone, and Fire had noticed that he had gone through many groomers, and the stalls next to him once held friends, now the battle field holds all of them. They had all been called to the fount line of the battle. Fire At Will knew that one day it would be his time to go out to the front line too, with a brave rider. But what is it worth? as soon as they hit the apposing crowd, he would be struck with pointed guns, and shot many times. Odds are that would be in the face. then...he would have only killed about three men from charging in?! there was no point to this. "Why must humans always fight" Fire whispered as he looked down at the bottom of his stall. "why?" How he wished to be free......
That day, when Fire At Will would be sent out into the fount line had come far too soon. Fire heard bombs and guns shots outside of his stall. He knew that soon the general would come in, and take him out there. Fire had seen this too many times before. But, just when he thought it was only the general, 2 other men came in dragging 3rd. It was the General! he was badly hurt, his leg blown off....probably from a land mine or bomb. The blood left a train on the concrete floor. This was so disgusting. While one of the men attended to the General, the other was talking to him. Fire heard one of them say " get out.....and fast....the planes....." One of the men who was talking to the general turned and looked at Fire. He walked over, his steel toe boots could be heard over the loud sounds outside. So The soldier, un-familiar to Fire, walked into the stall with him. But there was something different, something strange about this human, he seemed as though he wanted something form Fire. but not in a bad way like the other humans had did. The Human slowly walked up to startled horse, and looked at him with a compassionate expression. He spoke kind strong words into Fire's ears fastly and softly saying " Ok horse, they found our base, now if you don't work with me....we will both be blown up!" at that moment, all of the pieces of the puzzle fit together....the General told this human to get out if he valued his life. Fire At will knew that this soldier valued his life, and needed to get out as fast as he could. Fire at will knew that he would need to run as fast as his sore legs could carry him before the planes came an bombed the entire base he once felt safe in. The eager soldier mounted Fire At wills back and struck his boots in the side of Fire. Fires startled body knocked down the stall door, and he headed for freedom.
His massive body swept by the General and the man next to him. then Fire shifted his body in a tackling possession and slammed through the door in one massive stroke. The cool dark outside air made Fire At Will's heart stop for a quick second. But the worse part was all of the fighting men. He took one quick look at what he was going to gallop through, then the solider kicked him in the side again, and screamed " LOCK AND LOAD! THIS IS ALL OR NOTHING!!!"
He vaulted forwards with all of his strength. the dust behind him, and the fighting men ahead. This was the most intense moment of Fires life, he was going SO fast at the men, he wanted to stop in fear of getting shot in the face like what he pictured before. NO! He would not let this man or himself die, there was too much to live for! and here....it CAME!!! Fire tightly closed his eyes at the last second
BAAAAAMMMM!!!! Fire felt 3 men hit his chest, then slide underneath his fast moving body. He felt their skulls and stomachs rip open from his heavy, hoofs. Fire at will kept on. He dodged men, and bullets, twisting and swaying through the crowds of men. He would hear screams as he passed as fast as he could.
Then he saw it. Out of the dust blowing in his face, he saw the hill. they were only about a mile away.
Then. he heard the planes over his hoofs pounding the dirt. His eyes opened wide, and his heart skipped a beat. The soldiers eyes opened wide as well. He looked back towards the dispersing crowds of men. He put his head towards Fire's as if he was a Jockey at a race, and his goal was the finish line. He pushed his rear into the air, and pushed his legs up close to Fires body. These simple movements told Fire At Will that the solider knew that they would and COULD make it!!
Fire kicked it into gear, the hill was only 100 feet away, and the planes were 10,00. " I am flying!!" Fire thought as he noticed his speed!
then....all went silent....all Fire At will could hear was his heart beat......then.....at the top of the hill.....he jumped.
he felt the solider slowly come up off of his back, they were falling. Things raced and flashed in Fires head. "was this the end?" " what will I fall on?" " we were better off at the base with a fast death"
when all hope was gone.....SPLASH!!!! the cool water kicked Fire back into reality. He saw the solider rise above the water. He had hope again! Fire looked up as he bobbed in the cool ravine, they were about 1,000 feet down, safe from any bombs. Then the planes shock the water, and the solider quickly pushed Fires head under the water so his eardrums would not implode. Fire opened his eyes under the water and saw the kind solider looking back at him then........BAM!!!! The water shacked and swayed from the sound and the 2 lifted there heads out of the water, the planes passed over their soaked heads. The both looked at each other, the solider holding a sympathetic smile on his blood and dirt stained face. The war, even though lost....was over.

The solider brought Fire At Will home, and showed the hero to his family. When they got to his house, a middle- aged woman peered out the fount window. she saw the teen-age solider and her eyes opened wide. She ran out of the front door crying, and she gave the solider a huge hug.
" Gerard! my son....." she cried on his shoulder for a few seconds and looked up at his face.
" Mom, I told you that I would always come home" He showed a faint smile as he griped his mother tighter.
" mom," Gerard said as he lead his quivering mother towards Fire
" This is Fire At Will" He said as he ran his warm hand down Fires neck.
" He is the horse who saved my life" Gerard's mother stuck out one of her tear soaked hands and put it over Fires muzzle.
" Oh how it felt good to have a kind humans touch" Fire At Will thought.

3 more months past, and Gerard had a old stall out back, Fire At Will was put into that stall with fresh food and water every day. they had a clear view of the mountains, and he had a pasture in the valley. Fire knew he was happy here, but he knew that his heart belonged somewhere else. Every evening, Fire would go out to the pasture and look out upon the un-touched land. Watching the eagles and deer play in the fields. Gerard grew sad, he knew that soon he would have to set Fire At Will free.
that day, would be the next sun rise.
It was a normal evening, Fire At Will went out into the pasture at sunset to watch the deer eat, an the sun fall under the mountains. But unexpectedly Gerard was sitting on the handmade wooden fence. Fire At Will stopped close to the teen age boy and looked at him. Gerard leaped down off of the fence towards the gate facing the mountains. Fire At Will was confused and un-sure.
Gerard opened the gate and stuck out his hand towards the mountains.
" Go free...you deserve it" Gerard said as a tear rolled down his face.
Fire At Will stood still, and closed his eyes.
" What are you still doing here Fire?!" " Go free!" Gerard tried to stay positive. But he just could not help crying.
Fire at will slowly walked towards the boy, with a bitter sweet look on his face.
He swung his head over the boys shoulder, and Gerard threw his arms around the war horses thick neck.
" I will always remember you, and how we cheated death together!" Gerard spoke loud and proud.
Fire took his head off of the boy and gave him a happy nod. he did a semi rear and lunged out of the gate, he galloped off, and onto a hill. The sun setting from behind him. He did a loud neigh as he reared into the air.
Gerard knew, that in that one last call Fire at will said " You Will always be in my heart...Gerard!" So he jumped into the air with joy, and yelled with the horse form a distance. One last smile, and leap and Fire At Will was gone forever.....

2 years latter Fire at Will found Sabure's heard the " Suna Arashi Heard" and was excepted into it. he now lives happily with them. For a long retirement from the war......

who knows? maybe someday they will see each other again...

Fire at will is (c) *spiritstallion4eva

Critiques


:iconleadmare1234321:
Well, first off this is a very good peice. And I really like it. But their are just a few small errors that can be changed in the next one.

Fisrt off, the snout is just a tadd odd shaped. But that could be your style. You made it look good there.

The legs are just a bit to skinny. Horses usually have fatter legs up top, but after the ankle the get skinnier. And the hooves are aa bit to pointy.

The rest looks pretty good. And the coloring (Might be because of your scanner/camera) Needs to be a touched up in a few spots. Like the belly, there isnt much shading there.

But for the rest, you did a great job! And these are all things you can easily fix.
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Well, I have to say, this peice is beautiful! Your shading and colouring skills are beautiful! The shine on the mane and tail are very realistic, infact, i wouldnt change anything about them! However, A few things I would like to suggest;

On a real horse, when looking at conformation, you should imagine an invisible line where the girth should go - on this pic about a cm back from the base of the forleg - there should be the same amount of horse infront as behind. As you can see, Will's rear is longer than his front.

For the next point, His fetlock is a tiny bit long on his front left - the shape and actual joining to the hoof and leg are perfect, just long :aww:

Okay, so next, lets look at the legs. If you image a horses leg only has limited movement; you will see that his fore right leg is kind of awkward. A horse could have his hoof there, but theleg is slightly too far forward at the base. If you image he has his chest facing away from us slightly, his right leg will look further back... Does that make sense?? lol, probably not! :lmao: Anyway, as I was saying, the back legs are great - maybe his hind quarters are a smidgen big, but nothing too major. okay next, if you try to think, that both his front legs will be the same length, and the same with his back legs. His front right is actually longer than the other, but that can be solved by moving the left joint lower!

Hmm... my last point would be to make the head bigger and the neck longer... Thats about it though! :heart:

Sorry this was kinda long, its only tiny things I just wanted to point out :love: I love this peice, its absolutely gorgoues!
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He is gorgeous! Well done! :D

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=o He's beautiful! I love him, he's amazing ^^ Love the barb wire detailing.

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:drool: he is sexeh. :3

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:D thanks!! and yea I know:drool:

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why thank you very much:D

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I :heart: L from Death Note :aww: '
Proud member of =DeathNotefan cub :dance:
Cant spell Holly without L :heart:
why is L made for me? We have the same birthday, we both have improper pousture, love sugar, and HATE Kira!!
:iconspiritstallion4eva:
:hug: thank you very much!

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I :heart: L from Death Note :aww: '
Proud member of =DeathNotefan cub :dance:
Cant spell Holly without L :heart:
why is L made for me? We have the same birthday, we both have improper pousture, love sugar, and HATE Kira!!
:iconjoelieisqueen:
:) your welcome. :D

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adoptable account: *adopt-a-horse
stables: ~Dancing-Skye-Stables
:hug::glomp: I LOVE YOU. ;D
:iconkittyxhustler:
=] Welcome!

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:iconlaceymay14:
wow!! He's really unique!! :love: i love him!! Great job with the detail of the barbed wire, it looks awesome!!! :clap: he seems like an interesting character! keep it up!

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daw thank you very much!:hug: yea, people seem to like the barbed wires:D I should use them more:XD:

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I :heart: L from Death Note :aww: '
Proud member of =DeathNotefan cub :dance:
Cant spell Holly without L :heart:
why is L made for me? We have the same birthday, we both have improper pousture, love sugar, and HATE Kira!!

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